There was once a couple that was so in love and seemed to
have the perfect marriage. Other couples envied them. They were both so happy
with one another. They never fought or disagreed. Everyone always told them
they were so meant to be.
Mother with Child. |
They had built such a loving home and wanted to add more
love, a child. They tried and tried, but had no luck. One day the wife felt
something and knew that they had been blessed with a child.
They waited and waited. So excited for the day they could rest
their eyes on their son or daughter. The day finally came and their beautiful
baby son came out healthy. But, something went very wrong with the wife. She
turned red and was bleeding and bleeding. The husband didn’t know what to do. He
watched his wife take her last breath. She had gone. And just as the baby was
crying so was the husband. Weeping for his beloved wife.
The man stopped his crying and began wondering. Wondering
how he was going to take care of his infant child. How was he going to nourish
it? How was he going to care for it all by himself?
The next day, after a long night, looked for an old maid to
take care of his child. He found a nice, sweet old lady who had raised 5
children of her own who were all grown now. She loved the little boy like her
own. It pleased the husband to see his boy taken care of and loved by a mother
figure, but he couldn’t help but wonder how not having a mother would affect
the boy.
A few weeks later the old maid told the husband that the
baby cries all day long but stop his crying and is silent at night. She wasn’t sure
why and neither was the father. One night the old maid stayed up to see what
made the boy stop crying.
One night she was up and heard a creek in the floor and what
sounded like steps. She creped up to the boy’s room. What she saw was
unbelievable. She saw his mother bent over in her ghost like state feeding the
boy from her bosom. The old maid couldn’t believe what she saw. The mother saw
the old maid and rushed up and out of the window.
The boy was still silent so the old maid went over to his
crib and noticed the boy was not moving. He was dead just as his mother was.
Author’s Note: This week I read stories from the Russian
Folktale section. I found these stories interesting and easy to read. These
stories were separated by story and were not a continuous story. So for my
story this week I focused on only one story, The Dead Mother. I kept my story
very close to the original, not steering away at all really except how I told
it and a few minor details. In the original story, the couple is very much in
love and have a child. The mother dies right away. The father hires an old lady
who notices the baby doesn’t make noise at night. She finds that the dead
mother is nursing the baby who also ends up dying. I wasn’t sure how the baby
died in the original story so I didn’t add how he died in mine.
Hello again Averey!
ReplyDeleteI really loved reading your storytelling this week. It was a really easy read and you kept me really engaged the whole time! There are a couple of spot in your story where you have a few sentences that are fragments. I can see how your story is flowing in your head, but it does not necessarily make sense written out! The end of the story is so sad thought! I wonder why the baby died. I guess you leave that up tot he reader to imagine!
Hey Averey! I remember reading the original of this story for my week thirteen, too. I felt kind of let down by the original ending, I think it would've been really awesome if you could have changed it or some other major part of the story. Most of the Russian Folktales I read this week left me pretty down, you know? They were all either super sad or had the same story just told in a different setting. I like how you tried to tackle one of them and make it your own!
ReplyDeleteHello Avery,
ReplyDeleteYour storytelling post for the week had been very shocked at the end. It was sad that the mother died after child birth and am happy that the dad still wanted the child to have a mother figure. That was a pretty big twist at the end. I know that it makes the reader believe that the baby is dead but could it only be at night so the mom can be with him? Just a thought.
I read this story too when I was browsing through the UnTextbook for mother and child stories. I think it is really sad. I think that this story may have been an attempt to explain the death of young infants in their sleep. A lot of folklore aims to explain the unexplainable. It is also comforting to think of a dead mother coming to care for her son in the night.
ReplyDeleteThis was a sad story to read. There are a lot of happy stories but not as many sad ones. I feel like the story could have used a little bit of a reason for how the baby died. However, having the ending left up for interpretation is still pretty good. This story kind of reminds me of the movie “Mama.” If you haven’t seen it, the movie is pretty much about a ghost who raises two girls and are attached to them.
ReplyDeleteSPOILER ALERT: At the end of the movie, the female protagonist tries to save the girls from the ghost but only saves one of them while the other is taken away by the ghost.