THERE was a man, and he had nought,
And robbers came to rob him;
He crept up to the chimney-pot,
And then they thought they had him.
But he got down on t' other side,
And then they could not find him.
He ran fourteen miles in fifteen days,
And never looked behind him.
Steve was
loading the dishwasher when he heard a clashing sound. He stopped what he was
doing and walked closer to where the sound came from. He thought it came from
his living room but wasn’t sure. He walked closer and closer and heard yet another
clashing sound. But, not he also heard voices. He saw 3 men standing near his
living room table wearing masks and carrying guns. They found me, her thought.
He knew they were looking for him but didn’t think they would find him this
quickly. He looked around in a panic. Where can I hide, where can I go? He
asked himself. He looked around and saw that his only escape was his chimney.
Steve ran to his chimney and shimmied up and hid inside. He could hear them
looking for him and threatening to kill him. Steve started sliding down the
chimney. He couldn’t hold himself any longer. The men heard him and ran to the
chimney. His life flashed before his eyes and Steve got the strength to shimmy
all the way up and out of the chimney. He jumped off the roof and started to
run and run and run. He was going to have to start all over again. New name.
New town. New life. Steve was tired of running. He missed his family and
friends. He wanted to know how his children were doing, how big they are now.
Steve just kept running and running. He had no chance to see his family again
if he was dead. He ran and ran. He finally reached his safe house where he had
everything he needed to start over again. Money, car, new identification, cell
phone. He had to make it quick so the men wouldn’t find him. He grabbed
everything he needed and headed for the train station. Maybe they won’t find me
in Paris, he thought. But, this was his last time to run. He was going to fight
back next time and figure out a way to reunite with his family. One day.
Bibliogrophy: The Nursery Rhyme Book, edited by Andrew Lang and illustrated by L. Leslie Brooke (1897)
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Bibliogrophy: The Nursery Rhyme Book, edited by Andrew Lang and illustrated by L. Leslie Brooke (1897)
This was a very interesting little story about the nursery rhyme that you created. In comparison to the nursery rhyme, the man ran way more than fourteen miles in fifteen days. I found it interesting how the man have everything set up for a second life because he knew the three men were coming after him. Is the reason why the man ran to Paris because it was one of the places you have been to? I enjoyed reading your story and it has me wanting for a sequel to where the hunted man will strike back and reunite with his family. Sounds just like a movie!
ReplyDeleteThis is a pretty cool story. I pictured it becoming a movie and the man running away. The man scooting up the chimney would have had a ton of adrenaline because it was a live or die type situation. The greatest part of the story is the man's motivation, his family. I think that is a great motivator for all of us. Good job on doing that because it makes it relatable for most people when they read this story.
ReplyDeleteWow! I really enjoyed reading your story. It really gives me a feel and a background story for the poem and lets me relate to what poem is talking about. I really do like how the man running away is someone hiding who only wishes to be with his family. This shows his desperation when he runs away to save his life. I also really like how you ended the story making the reader know that next time he will fight back! Keep up the good work.
ReplyDeleteThis is a good story! But, to make it great, I suggest that you separate your story into paragraphs.
ReplyDeleteWithout seperating it, the story is hard to read. Make each paragraph have sentences with the same topic.
Bite sized paragraphs is what makes a story great.
The myths we read don't always separate the paragraphs enough, as they are translations.
So, I suggest reading a modern novel of any genre, to see how modern authors seperate paragraphs.
You can even just have one sentence as a paragraph in order to draw the reader's attention to a certain point!
If not this story, I would reccomend trying to seperate your next story into paragraphs.
If you have any questions let me know, I'm a Professional Writing major, so I love talking about writing!